Um is this The right place...?

[rainshadow]

b]Name:[/b] Rainshadow

Age: 12 moons

Gender: Female

Clan: Shadowclan

Rank: Warrior

Picture: i177.photobucket.com/albums/w229/kittysrule55/Rainshadow.jpg

Appearance: Black she-cat with white on her under belly up to her chin and on her paws. she has white whiskers and emerald green eyes. medium legth, sharp claws and teeth. she has a black nose and a black tail. She has a long slender body with normal length legs.

Personality: Rainshadow is a nice cat, but can have a temper. She's very sensetive and wants a mate. She can be a mean at times but has a soft spot for kits. She hopes to have her own when she finds a mate. She's wants to find one soon and hopefully be able to have kits.

History: Rainshadow doesn't really have much of a history, she was born and raised in Shadowclan.

Role Play Sample: ?

Secret Word: I read the rules I promise! I couldn't figure it out but I'm going to take a guess cause there was kinda a random word. Is it....like ily? or something?

Other:

[| COMRADE |]

Okay, first of all, this is the right board. Good job x]. Is this your first cat bio? She's a very pretty cat.

- Anyways, The appearance and personality are fine. The history is more like, did anything happen when she was a kit, an apprentice, and when she became a warrior. You don't need much, just a few sentences.

- A role-play sample is when you are actually typing AS your cat, in third person.

Example- A muscular tabby tom pushed his ways through the bushes at the edge of the camp, amber eyes alert and wary. As he glanced around the camp, he couldn't help noticing the kits tumbling around near the nursery, and the apprentices play fighting. His whiskers twitched as he remembered the days when he was so careless and had so much fun. His eyes traveled across the clearing as he laid his fresh-kill down on the pile, and wandered over to the edge of the clearing without taking any for himself.


- Okay? Yours doesn't have to be so descriptive. Just do the best that you can manage with your own cat. Role-Play samples are always fun.

- And the secret word. If you look at one of the rules it will say 'the word is' and then that word is the secret word.

Otherwise your bio is great. With those few changes you should be good to go!

[rainshadow]

Heh yes this is my first cat bio. I am new to this site =) Hazaa I have found the secret word. It is whisper =)


History: Rainshadow was attacked by a fox when she wars a kit leaving a scar on her back left leg. Though she made a full recovery and did not interfere with her training. (Is that enough?)

Roleplay sample: Rainshadow padded through the exit of camp. Her pads cold from the dew on the blades of grass on the forest floor. She strolled through the trees, scenting a mouse. She crept behind a bush spotting the small creature nibbling on a nut in front of her. She stalked the unaware animal slowly. When she was close enough to pounce, she leapt out from her hiding place behind the bush and captured the wriggling piece of prey in her paws. She delivered a swift blow to the neck, killing it.

[| COMRADE |]

Okay, xD. Approved. x] Great job!